#FirstLineFriday CAW (Chapter 2)

FLF

I’m taking a cue from Joleene Naylor on this one.

#FirstLineFriday is the end-of-a-week posting of the first line (or two) of a published story, potential story, or a work in progress. It’s a great way to get feedback on your work… or to stalk other writers and see what they’re doing. Whichever 🙂 Leave a link to your blog in the comments or on Rami Ungar’s, who started this super nifty concept.

This comes from the second chapter of Crusade Across Worlds, the fourth book in the Arizal Wars Series, releasing this June.

“Nhazual spots something over my shoulder. I look, but there’s nothing there – only the Nerwolix forest, blurring and fading into itself.

If you don’t know who Nhazual is or why she’s in the Nerwolix forest, you should catch up. You can get the first book for FREE on Smashwords here.

What do you think? You like? You don’t like?

What’re your first couple lines?

6 thoughts on “#FirstLineFriday CAW (Chapter 2)

  1. Mason T. Matchak says:

    Hmm. I think this is the sort of line that only works well when it’s not the start of something brand new. For the fourth book, when you can expect your reader to know the characters and setting and thus know who Nhazual is and perhaps what the Nerwolix forest is, then it works. As a sentence from out of nowhere, it’s a little confusing.

    Granted, if I was reading it under normal circumstances, I’d be able to read the second line and hopefully get some context and insight as to what’s going on. ^_^

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