#FirstLineFriday CAW (Chapter 1)


I’m taking a cue from Joleene Naylor on this one.

#FirstLineFriday is the end-of-a-week posting of the first line (or two) of a published story, potential story, or a work in progress. It’s a great way to get feedback on your work… or to stalk other writers and see what they’re doing. Whichever 🙂 Leave a link to your blog in the comments or on Rami Ungar’s, who started this super nifty concept.

This comes from the first chapter of Crusade Across Worlds, the fourth book in the Arizal Wars Series, releasing this June.

“I can smell them.

Horrops have that odor—dirt mixed with something sour and stale. Like too much raw meat. Or death.”

If you don’t know what a Horrop is, you should catch up. You can get the first book for FREE on Smashwords here.

What do you think? You like? You don’t like?

What’re your first couple lines?


8 thoughts on “#FirstLineFriday CAW (Chapter 1)

  1. Mason T. Matchak says:

    I think it works. ^_^ “I can smell them” evokes a sense we humans don’t usually think about too much unless it’s really noticeable, so starting with that suggests something is going wrong.

    I don’t have a first line ready, but the book I’m planning on writing next starts with one of the main characters talking about what she’d like done with her body if she dies, which is a distinct possibility with what she’s about to get into.

  2. Loni Townsend says:

    I like it. 🙂

    My first lines in my current WIP are pretty weak as of yet. I couldn’t decide if it would be better to post the prologue first line, which is technically the first line of the book, or chapter 1’s first line, which is where the story begins.

    So you get both. 😛

    Her parents were dead, but she had a brother. Well, half-brother.

    Chapter 1
    Everyone he loved ended up dead.

    Hmmm, they seem a little similar, eh?

  3. Nicola says:

    Great opening! I love the word Horrop! I’m one of the ignorant but will definitely be educating myself 🙂

    My opening line to a new WIP (short story) is:

    He is usually the hunter. But today he is being hunted.

    Have a great week.

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